Throws you right in the middle of the action from the start -- I approve. Your English writing is very good, particularly considering it is not your native language. Seriously, many of my old high school classmates would be hard-pressed to write as well, let alone better.

I loved the way you used Cam's eyes and involuntary crying to illustrate the strength of her emotion. Her powerful emotions granting her increased strength and resolve lends her an even more human feel. After all, emotion can drive humans to perfom feats that normally lie beyond their abilities.

Great stuff.

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