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predaking50ae
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Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 11 2009, 9:42 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 11 2009, 9:42 PM EST
http://terminatorwiki.fox.com/page/Predaking50ae%27s+Fanfiction

I started this fanfic on January 6th- 5 days ago.
Since I wrote it for myself, I may not have given enough detail about the surroundings or the appearance of characters.

There are currently 29 'scenes'. My 'scenes' are not chapters. They were not initially named or numbered. When I decided today that I would release it, I added titles and numbers so that it would be easier to read(also combining several, reducing the initial total of 31).

I have never technically done more than a single draft of anything I've ever written.

'Scenes' were individually reread, but I haven't even read my own story as a whole.

The important characters are all from the TSCC series.

My version of time travel doesn't match up with the Terminator franchise(although I don't contradict a single canonical paradox). Rather, it matches other sci-fi franchises where multiple timelines can interact.

Some imagery may be disturbing, some is intended to be.

*Warning: Cameron and John fall in love* ('love' does NOT mean 'sex', although I make no promises about what will happen later).
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Brovane
Brovane
1. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 12 2009, 9:23 AM EST | Post edited: Jan 12 2009, 9:23 AM EST
"http://terminatorwiki.fox.com/page/Predaking50ae%27s+Fanfiction

I started this fanfic on January 6th- 5 days ago.
Since I wrote it for myself, I may not have given enough detail about the surroundings or the appearance of characters.

There are currently 29 'scenes'. My 'scenes' are not chapters. They were not initially named or numbered. When I decided today that I would release it, I added titles and numbers so that it would be easier to read(also combining several, reducing the initial total of 31).

I have never technically done more than a single draft of anything I've ever written.

'Scenes' were individually reread, but I haven't even read my own story as a whole.

The important characters are all from the TSCC series.

My version of time travel doesn't match up with the Terminator franchise(although I don't contradict a single canonical paradox). Rather, it matches other sci-fi franchises where multiple timelines can interact.

Some imagery may be disturbing, some is intended to be.

*Warning: Cameron and John fall in love* ('love' does NOT mean 'sex', although I make no promises about what will happen later)."
Thanks for taking the time to write this. I read through the story and liked it. Sometime the plot kind of moved a little quick but overall I enjoyed it. Some fanfic I start reading and stop after a couple of paragraphs. Yours held my interest all the way through. I liked the part where you had Derek punished through another Terminator. I also liked the part where John and Sarah went through all of Cameron's memories.
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2. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 12 2009, 12:22 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 12 2009, 12:22 PM EST
Read it before I went to bed yesterday. I liked it too, keep it coming. :) Do you find this valuable?    
ClaudeFTW
ClaudeFTW
3. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 12 2009, 1:21 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 12 2009, 1:21 PM EST
It's nice but you jumped a bit too soon into the John/Cameron thing. It's okay tho, it's how the story goes.

Great job and I sure do hope to see more.
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predaking50ae
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4. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 12 2009, 2:45 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 12 2009, 2:45 PM EST
Thanks for the kind words, guys.

The plot moves fast because I tried to write it like an episode from the series. Much of it- including some Q&A -is intended to take place 'offscreen'.

If anyone has some specific nitpicks, tips, criticisms, etc., and don't want to post spoilers, feel free to send me a message.

I haven't really decided where the story is going, yet. I remember Stephen King talking about good stories needing to grow organically, rather than being plotted out in advance. Then again, I don't like Stephen King's novels... lol
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ClaudeFTW
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5. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 12 2009, 2:49 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 12 2009, 2:49 PM EST
Also, Id like to add that I love the Jameron thing you've done. That's exactly the kind of Jameron I want to see in the show. Do you find this valuable?    
Pharazon
Pharazon
6. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 12 2009, 2:52 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 12 2009, 2:52 PM EST
Looks good so far! I'm gonna have to read the rest later though. Keep it up. Do you find this valuable?    

MetalHunter
7. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 12 2009, 7:55 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 12 2009, 7:55 PM EST
"The T-880 strode over and glared down at him.

"First Lieutenant Derek Reese of the 132nd S.O.C.?"

"The one and only." his attitude didn't last long.

The machine grabbed him by the throat and lifted him off of his feet.

"You have been found guilty of consorting with the enemy, disobeying direct orders, and compromising the security of TechCom. Do you understand?"

"WHAT?" he choked.

"Do you understand?"

"YES!"

"By the order of General Connor, you are relieved of your rank and expelled from TechCom. However, I have been ordered not to terminate you. Do you understand?"

"YES!"

"Have a nice day." The T-880 said in an all too friendly voice, before literally hurling him through the closed front door."
I thank you that you have caught the truth about Season 2 in a few sentences! This is the TRUTH! No "(about Riley) she become to develop true feelings" or other nonsense!

It also is the first time when I saw a real development of John: John Connor, the man who is the Skynet nightmare! Accurate! It's the Man more hard as a Metal!

The scene in which John TORTURE a traitor (Jesse) LIKE as a Machine and SHE/IT (Cameron), a Machine, begging him to stop, is more realistic than the idiot EMO that we part.

This is the John Connor: a Man Who Is More Ferocious Than A Terminator.

And that's the tragedy: Cameron becomes more human for him, to finally stop John becoming a Machine, more than a Machine!

Thanks!
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Pharazon
Pharazon
8. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 12 2009, 9:03 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 12 2009, 9:03 PM EST
Got through reading it all. I agree that the plot is very fast moving, but the writing is very well done. It keeps you reading. The dialogue made sense, and aside from the somewhat quick jump into the Jameron, provided an interesting read all round.
By the way, I liked that the other characters were given some attention as well. Nice work. :)
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Mike70056
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9. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 12 2009, 10:48 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 12 2009, 10:48 PM EST
Good work. =)
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predaking50ae
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10. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 13 2009, 12:31 AM EST | Post edited: Jan 13 2009, 12:31 AM EST
"Good work. =)
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Thanks!

I've been reading your fanfics religiously(so to speak), and can't wait for more of them.
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predaking50ae
predaking50ae
11. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 13 2009, 12:35 AM EST | Post edited: Jan 13 2009, 12:35 AM EST
Thanks to everyone for the feed back.

I just added Scenes 130 through 136. I'm especially proud of 136.

Criticism of these latest scenes is much appreciated, as I'm not happy with scene 133...
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daemondark
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12. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 13 2009, 1:19 AM EST | Post edited: Jan 13 2009, 1:19 AM EST
Fu@#ing Excellent.

It has a bit of everything for everyone. Great stuff :)
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predaking50ae
predaking50ae
13. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 13 2009, 11:51 AM EST | Post edited: Jan 13 2009, 11:51 AM EST
Now up to Scene 144, which leaves you with a huge, cliffhanger ending.

Until I write some more, that is.
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Pharazon
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14. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 13 2009, 2:57 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 13 2009, 2:57 PM EST
"Now up to Scene 144, which leaves you with a huge, cliffhanger ending.

Until I write some more, that is."
You can, uh, feel free to update any time now. =)
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Mike70056
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15. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 13 2009, 5:36 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 13 2009, 5:36 PM EST
"Thanks!

I've been reading your fanfics religiously(so to speak), and can't wait for more of them."
Thank you, the next one will be out soon. It's still cooking at the moment. =)
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predaking50ae
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16. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 14 2009, 3:53 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 14 2009, 3:53 PM EST
Added scenes up to 149. 1  out of 1 found this valuable. Do you?    
Pharazon
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Jan 14 2009, 3:55 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 14 2009, 3:55 PM EST
"Added scenes up to 149."
You are a good person.
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Cammynator
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18. RE: Predaking50AE's First Fanfic
Jan 14 2009, 3:55 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 14 2009, 3:55 PM EST
"Added scenes up to 149."
yay!!
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ClaudeFTW
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Jan 14 2009, 4:15 PM EST | Post edited: Jan 14 2009, 4:15 PM EST
*hands pancakes to the man*

Thanks a lot.
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