"Very nicely done, Casobs. Nice way with words. Good description. And a good subtle reveal about the characters we see. Instead of saying John Connor drives down, we guess at who it is until someone calls it that. And describing Catherine Weaver by her red hair, also works well.

Interesting that you are working backwards from John finding Cameron, to the ending of Born to Run.

Only things that I think need improving is your use of space. When you get to another paragraph, I would put an extra space between the next line, it makes it easier to read. Particularly it would help when you go into the flashback, to help make it clear that we are jumping back in time. Also, be careful with tense confusion. In the beginning you switch between past and present tense.

The whole thing ran as a good teaser for me leaving me to want more. Keep it up :)
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"Wow! Thats a lot! But I like it, makes me think about It. As I've said, I have a general idea of how the story will playout, but I wanted feedback to give ideas on how to format it. I haven't written Chapter 2 yet, but I'd like your opinion:

I still want to do flashback chapters that will go through some of John hardest (and best) mements, but I am also thinking (partly from what you said) that I should do alternating Chapters with Cameron's life during the 2 year. However, I'm not sure if this will confuse the story at all.

And just to mention about who hee thinks he is... I got a plan for that ;)"

"I don't really read fanfic but i mentioned quite a few times now that S3 should be called "Terminator: Rebirth" and should start fresh without the limitation of having all storylines focus on Sarah. "

"Hey Casobs2, read all three chapters, and I agree, you can be proud of the third especially. You have a good plot, and a good, plausible foundation for Cameron's development. Keep it up! "

"Hey, you gave me my first compliment, as well as my fanfic thread's first post. It's the least I can do! "